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The track is fairly quiet.
There's not a lot going on to interest me as a listener, the texture and tonality are pretty much constant.
I don't know what to say other than there just isn't much happening here, and it's kind of a let down. The composition isn't particularly compelling, and the instrumentation leaves a lot to be desired.
Quiet.. im sorry but this track is meant to be a one instrument track, not every track has to be filled up to the chin with instruments does it.
It leaves room for the composition to fit like a puzzle and not become a blurr of sound.
A review.
Minimalism doesn't have to be this slow.
I can't describe how tiring your initial theme got, while waiting for some kind of change and additional support. Repeating one singular theme throughout the entire song is a risky move, and when the action of the music is this slow, it gets excruciating.
I kept it simple so there would be more room to weave that melody trough. :)
Also, the track itself is meant to feel like a drag, walking.
Afterall, i only got 10 fingers and i can play this on a piano.
Reviewed for justice.
The composition shows that you've got a grasp on concepts.
The instrumentation is fine, I enjoy lower fidelity work.
You establish a good theme right off the bat, and quickly move to support it with a very nice, regimental percussion section. This track starts to go sour around the 0:25 mark, when that first dissonant synth comes in. It's unpleasant to listen to, and distracting. I felt myself dreading its return.
I honestly think if you rethought that singular piece of instrumentation a lot could be accomplished with this track. The mixing is mostly fine, though you could definitely experiment with your panning. Everything seems to be right in the center, and so all the instruments are competing for space.
There are improvements to be made.
Though i can understand some people think its a unpleasant sound the very sound is exactly what gave this track its charm, i wanted it to have that eerieness and do so in an original way to aid the setting of an undead hermitage. Afterall i created the sound myself. Perhaps ill sometime try to do a remake of it in fl. Made this one in music® for the playstation, same with all my other old work. :)
I see.
Instrumentation isn't terrible.
The thing that stands out as needing immediate improvement is the vocals. Tired style aside, there's a lot of places where they seem to fall completely out of tune with themselves, leading to an uncomfortable amount of dissonance. If this is intentional, I'd love to hear the rationale, because I personally don't enjoy it. There's a couple places where your plosives get very percussive, and I think with the style you could push things like that fairly successfully.
And I get very tired of listening to the same two lyrics over and over. It may be specific to the genre, but I don't think it would hurt the listenability if there was a greater variation.
There are repeated style shifts that feel unmotivated to me, making this feel like less of a coherent work to me.
The piano bit that starts at 2:41 is written such that notes are falling in uncomfortable places, providing a very disorienting feeling of failed rhythm. Was this intentional? What were you trying to achieve?
I guess in the end you're showing some good ideas here, but there are stumbling blocks that could definitely be addressed.
I find everything to be perfect. No longer a beta.
Some solid ideas.
I'm not sure what exactly the requirements were for the piece to be submitted as an audition piece, but I'm going to go ahead and review this as a standalone song, so keep that in mind.
Okay, first... there needs to be some sort of percussion going on. A bass wouldn't hurt either. You can layer as many guitars as you like but it's still thin.
Every guitar sounds a bit thin to me. Some tone tweaking is definitely in order.
Some harmonies seem to fall enough out of tune to be uncomfortable to listen to.
Stopping the song and starting back up is kind of disheartening, especially without any fills from bass or drums.
It feels like you're trying to express as many ideas and riffs as you can, which makes the piece feel somewhat without aim.
Your rhythm riffs are pretty consistent in style and enjoyable and your leads maintain a pretty common thread, so that's a plus.
The transition into the clean section is handled fairly well, though I think I heard a couple foulups.
The sudden change in mood during the clean section was a little confusing to listen to, and I heard a few more parts where tuning seemed to be an issue, as well as a couple notes on the left lead that felt out of time.
Overall there are some really great ideas here and some solid composition for so many guitars, as well as some really solid playing, but I feel like it could have used a few more takes in places.
Very good review, thank you very much. This was a 20 minute recording, with my computer and a bad quality chatting mic. Sounds really weird sometimes, and It actually sounds better live. I just made this to show an idea of what it really is. Ill make the final version soon, with everything as perfect as I can. (: Thank you again.
it has potential
Your cymbals are way too bright, and the drums overall cut through the mix a bit too much for my taste.
The bass gets real muddy in places, to the point where the track becomes unpleasant to listen to.
The guitar's decent, but could use some leads.
It's reviews like this that make an artist an artist.
A little boring.
The minute-long buildup almost lost me. The choir sounding deal in the back just don't really do much for me. Not much of a texture.
The generic percussion almost lost me.
Your 'bell' lead sometimes descends a bit to harshly into dissonance, and never really develops a memorable or interesting theme.
The synths that start up in the middle don't seem to add much to the track.
Musically it just wasn't very interesting. It's four minutes long but honestly it felt like there was only a minute or two of ideas expressed.
Sweet.
Love the tone! Heavy as shit, classic 'wall of noise' rhythm guitar. Good harmonics too.
The drums feel mixed pretty far back to me, like they're buried under guitar and then the vocals.
Couple rough transitions (like around 1:00... i woulda let that chord ring all the way out while the next bit starts)
Vocals feel a little... dry to me. I don't do much with them so I'm not sure how to address the issue, but I think some of it is excessive proximity effect maybe. Maybe some EQing and a couple dB off the level would help.
I bet a real ripping solo coulda done this track some good, but overall this is definitely a very solid number. I enjoyed it greatly.
Thanks for mutilating it! Good review!
Wow.
As a voice demo, this isn't really helpful.
The only section in which you're singing is autotuned out of any kind of reality.
You aren't suited to any kind of metal vocals, because, frankly, you're still a kid. The way it is dude.
I'm not sure why the meow is in there.
I would like a sandwich please.
Its a JOKE
Pretty decent.
This isn't really my genre but it's definitely a fairly solid track.
Your sampled coke bottle gets real reedy in the upper range, which I kind of didn't like.
For the most part everything worked pretty well. There were a couple places where it felt like various instruments were competing for the same 'space' but nothing major.
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