This game doesn't really offer anything. A mech game without customization is basically unthinkable for me, and any simple isometric shooter without upgrades is just... boring.

There's no ultimate objective other than 'shoot the enemies' and no real pleasure to be gained from continuing forward.

LOVED IT

There needs to be some sort of previous shot indicator.

I guess my first question is why you would release two versions of ostensibly the same work.

Bass drum feels very overpowering in this one. It literally buries your other percussion.

I like the piano lead a lot. I wish it had some more time to speak. The little glitches in the arps near the end don't translate as well with this instrumentation, I think.

Again though, it feels like the length is fighting you here. It's like you've just started touching on some tension and then the song's over and it resolves. I want to hear you push forward with those ideas for a while.

I also think this work could benefit a little from some study into silence. It's a solid minute of those arps running, with no rests or breaks.

So I guess what I'd like to see with this is:

- Extend it. Push into some tension and dissonance for a while
- Revisit your percussion/mixing. Four on the floor gets old quick
- Play with silence, or at least relative silence. Maybe give that piano lead some time to speak by itself, let those arps fade away. Some kind of variation. It just feels like you've crammed all of this into a very short period of time and it'd be more comfortable with some breathing space.

There's a lot of good stuff here, so don't take this as overly negative.

I think some of your lead instruments could definitely come forward in the mix. They seem pretty well buried under that arppegiated synth, and it makes it pretty tough to really hear what's going on overall.

Aside from that it just seems so short that there's no time for a whole lot to be happening.

I'd like to hear a differently mixed render of this to see if the feel changes a little. I feel like I have to strain to make out what the melody is doing as it is.

Why an out of tune piano?

Why a giant rest after your intro?

Why a really boomy bass drum and... no other percussion until at least a minute in? There needs to be more than a kick and a hat.

And so you know, slayer is not a guitar. Your first 'guitar' line is really outside the realm of anything I've ever heard in a metal song. Your percussion gets drowned.

The second bit of guitar needs rhythmic variation. The drums need to have some motion.

The lead guitar isn't playing anything of interest. Metal leads tend to involve a fair bit of technical playing, runs up and down, sweep picking and the whole mess.

Constant runs of notes of the same duration are boring. Rhythmic variation.

I guess in the end all I can really say is that there are ways to fake a heavy metal song without guitars. This isn't one of them. If you're really interested in writing songs in that style, listen to some music, and then find one of the many guitarists in the AF to play it for you. I'd be more than willing to give you a guitar track or two.